“ It’s diner timeee !! “ as my auntie would say whenever we eat banseue. Thats our signal to hurry up and run as fast as you could to the dinner table before all the food is gone. I love banseue so of course I would be one of the kids that would be running for my life just to get to the table. As your run up, you can see the delicious crispy thin yellowy pancake folded in half. When you cut it in half, you could see the steam flowing out into the air, hearing the crack when you cut it and smell the deliciousness of all the ingredients mixed together and binding with the yellowy pancake mix. When my grandma makes it, you can hear the shrimp and the pork sizzle when going into the hot pan of oil, seeing all the steam from the water when she puts all the veggies in the pan and hearing her pour the yellowy- flour mixture to bind it all together.
You could hear all of my aunties and my grandma scrambling to make more for everybody since it would be gone in just minutes. It all started when me and my cousins were all younger. Every special occasion such as chinese new years, birthdays, or even just plain old dinner, our family loved making it and better yet, eating it. When we were little, one day our grandma introduce this recipe to us and every time she made it, it got better and better. We all went crazy for it that we demanded it on every special occasion.
But with such a great recipe, a lot of work goes into it too. Thats what got our family even closer. When ever we make it, we would all gather in the morning and we all go out to go grocery shopping for all the ingredients cause everything tastes better when it’s fresh. Everybody had a different list on what to get so that everybody would get involved. After we where done doing all the shopping, we all head to our grandmas house and start preparing for everything. Even the little kids would lend a hand ! Everybody had their own little job, whether it was washing the veggies, un-shelling the shrimp or snapping the unwanted part off of the bean sprout.
That’s why making this dinner was such a treat because one, we would all get together and spend some quality time with everybody. The second reason is because since everybody got involved we all built some hilarious memories that we would just cherish forever. Lastly, from all that hard work and waiting.. WE GET TO EAT !
4 comments:
Lina,
I think the first part of your essay where you open up with a scene was really great. You make images appear in my head, and I'm able to feel as if I were really there. Something I think you need to work on is the details actually. You have a lot, but I think being more specific about it would improve it by just a little. But, other than that I think you did a great job of making even me who dislikes fish have your dish sound appetizing.
Hey Lina! :D
So FINALLY I can comment! Haha, anyway, I really liked your essay. I've never heard of banseue. I even tried googling it up but nothing showed up, LOL. I liked how you included alot of sensory detail, so much that I could imagine myself with your family while the dish is being made. I think you should add a little more family history, though. But overall, GREAT essay! :)
hi lina
this is a very good essay and it is going to be and intresting one to read . i like how u put alot of detail in this so good job.
Hi Lina,
First a comment for your teammates: you've gotta be more specific, guys. Remember all of our practices. General comments are not really helpful to the writer...or to you when I assess your critique.
Now for my comments: I think it's great that you're introducing a new recipe to the class :) And I think the essay has great potential to weave the making of the dish with the family memories. You actually say that near the end of the essay. But you need to *show* it. Describe a bit of the different shopping trips, the "division of labor" as the various generations work on their part of the dish, include one or two of the "hilarious memories" that you mention in the last paragraph.
mrs s
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